Paper A Revision

The argument: Full-day kindergarten classes positively impact the academic growth of kindergarten students both in the short-term and in the long-term.

The purpose: To encourage parents to enroll their children in full-day kindergarten classes.
The audience: Parents who have the option to enroll their children in full-day kindergarten but may be leery of doing so. These are parents who may be fundamentally uneducated about the benefits of full-day kindergarten or may have some concerns about the developmental appropriateness of the classes.

The goal: To increase enrollment in full-day kindergarten classes.

How I do it: First, I use logos to appeal to the audience’s logic. I do this by citing multiple cross-sectional and longitudinal studies that demonstrate the positive impact of full day kindergarten classes. For example, I cite Zvoch, Reynolds, & Parker, 2007 who demonstrated the positive effect of full-day classes on literacy acquisition.
Second, I use pathos to appeal to the parents of kindergartners. I do this by including comments about “Dora the Explorer”, “Little Einstein”, and Goldfish crackers, all items familiar to a parent of a kindergartner. I also outline the benefits of full-day kindergarten to appeal to the parents’ emotional ties to their child’s well-being.
I use evidence that is both relevant to the discussion of the benefits of full-day kindergarten and to the audience specifically. For example, one study actually interviewed parents of full-day kindergartners and asked them how they felt about the extended-day classes (Boardman, 2005). This allows the audience to read the opinions of parents themselves rather than the opinions of myself, the author.
Finally, the evidence is very accurate. All of the evidence comes from credible sources in the field of education, the majority of it having undergone an extensive peer review process.

I believe this draft of the paper is more effective than the last. Certainly most parents are concerned about the academic well-being of their children. Thus, a brief paper that demonstrates the benefits of full-day kindergarten is useful.